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    dots Submission Name: darkness and lightdots
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    Author: shadow of death
    ASL Info:    17/M/baltimore
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 38/53/34
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsdarkness and lightdots
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    We exchanged promises of revolution in the expanding darkness
    I loved you, so the flower of evil sprouted
    I won't let anyone interfere with
    Everything that is to come in the future

    A fruit has told me of the future
    This city has forgotten reason
    These distorted and black times will
    Change into ideals, into dreams

    Why? Am I a broken messiah?
    The "end" that everyone has wished for...

    We exchanged promises of revolution in the expanding darkness
    I loved you, so the flower of evil sprouted
    I won't let anyone interfere with
    Everything that is to come in the future

    One day I will show you
    The sky that shines with light

    Why? Am I a broken messiah?
    The "paradise" that everyone dreamed of...

    We exchanged promises of revolution in the expanding darkness
    I loved you, so the flower of evil sprouted
    I won't let anyone interfere with
    Everything that is to come in the future

    One day I will show you
    The sky that shines with light




    Submitted on 2008-10-09 18:35:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well, you asked for it so ill comment. honestly, i love it. i love the words and the questions. its amazing... its so raw. you're awesome. thanks for sharing. its the perfect piece i needed today.


    love tina


    | Posted on 2008-12-12 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Well puppy, this wasn't half bad. I think it could have been formatted a little different. Some parts don't seem to fit in with other parts. Some lines seem longer and it just doesn't seem as if it would fit in with a melody. Lyric-wise, I think it was good. You actually wrote what you felt, without so much drama to what you were saying. Sometimes you try to add in words or discriptions that really don't fit in and looks kind of alien with the rest of the poem or song. But I think it was good. Miss u guys. AND



    I GOT CONTRACTED WITH ROTC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    i'm happy about that.

    Later,
    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2008-12-11 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
      well, as a song, it's slightly difficult to follow, got to suggest what people outta hum in there head while reading it you know. But it is good, as lyrics i do like it, which is actually rare there past few. should lengthen it!!!!

    48
    | Posted on 2008-10-21 00:00:00 | by every48seconds | [ Reply to This ]


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