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    dots Submission Name: counteracting the symptoms of reasondots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotscounteracting the symptoms of reasondots
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    the way of heaven is a vast net
    & although its mesh is wide,
    it catches everything.
    yet hell has a way
    of manifesting fury,
    yellow in the morning
    where the day forms,
    & it's harder to see when you're staring
    into the light that surrounds you.

    thus time, in it's way,
    counteracts the symptoms of reason,
    taking seemingly logical courses of action
    & costuming them into our lives
    like death has a way of invading.
    & it fulfills its purpose:
    one lies to themselves
    & the seams are sealed
    & packaged inside us; timebombs,
    beasts of clean relief..
    & i've seen you explode so many times
    inside me
    yet i'm still so honestly surprised
    to see you.

    perhaps the angels of my atmospheres
    will find me perpetually disappointed
    by life.
    or maybe by letting go,
    as i've learned to do,
    i'll teach myself to not remember you
    in the ways that distract my cardinal heart
    & i'll just move on
    as if love were something
    that anyone could just ignore...




    Submitted on 2008-10-09 19:22:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmm i like this alot. i like the way you make the sun hells fury, or at least i thought it was the sun =] and the piece itself is very well structured and well written. makes you think =]
    | Posted on 2009-04-10 00:00:00 | by Alexandra | [ Reply to This ]


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