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    dots Submission Name: sun-filled compartmentsdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 247
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotssun-filled compartmentsdots

    & artificial spheres might haunt me
    long into the endless nights,
    the deadly fingers that betray me
    even in my sleep
    where the air is more terrible
    than the memory of knowing anything.

    i find myself
    in the loneliest patches of woods
    with the moon at that ever mocking right angle above me,
    clawing at the earth, the soil of my under-darling,
    searching for some lost artifact
    of my own existence,
    something telling of the time i spent
    amongst the dust of this forest.

    i rub raw the skin of my wrists
    on the oaks around me,
    strangely hoping that just one
    will open its bark to me,
    revealing the possibility of my flesh
    entering into its own,
    releasing my limbs into its sun-filled compartments.

    the ocean is always inside me though.
    i close my eyes,
    drifting out over the oxygen & the weather
    & the infinite vibrations of whatever loves me.
    i can take my hands
    & with slight pushings
    return my heart to the coral of it's being,
    trembling beneath waves of unearthed treasures.

    it is the puzzle of living
    that compels me to escape,
    to dive into the purposeful blue without judgement.
    often when i open my eyes
    & stare into the mirror of everything
    i'm left saddened with what remains
    when, at last, i close my eyes again.

    i've found that it's been impossible
    to have known death so many times
    & to have not somewhat become it...

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