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    dots Submission Name: prozac gives me gutsdots
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    Author: StainedxBlades
    ASL Info:    23/f/ MA
    Elite Ratio:    1.76 - 8/13/24
    Words: 345
    Class/Type: Misc/Cutting or Mutilation
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    dotsprozac gives me gutsdots
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    death overcoming
    improbable being
    sweet kiss of the razors end
    darkness empowers
    inferno sinks in
    mind depressing
    not breaking, no bend
    thoughts are haunting
    everything i say and do
    never comes out right
    I haunt my mind
    during the day
    and still don't sleep at night
    wanna take prozac
    to gimme the guts
    to just end this now
    and stop the hurt
    i hate myself
    every ounce of my being
    wish i was someone else for a second
    just so i could end my own life
    make it not look like suicide
    the pain i hide
    inscripted in the walls of my heart
    insane thoughts
    of the love of death
    overpowers once more
    i find myself
    lost in the ashes
    of my once happy dreams
    now its nightmares
    no laugh track scenes
    and it all with the final flame
    a big bang moment
    no time to spare
    let go
    left alone
    always knew this day would come
    to be so happy
    i should have known
    it WAS too good to be true
    please try and fix me
    somethings broken
    no one cares
    so i continue to roam this earth
    hurting wut i love
    and loving what i've lost
    I had it all
    then i fucked it up
    I'll change my name
    and move away
    you'll never have to see
    this ugly face again
    so self-confidence
    you have no idea
    everything that goes wrong
    usually is because of fear
    fear of love
    fear of life
    more keeps comming
    cuz i'm afraid to die
    i could never do it
    i'm too much of a pussy
    maybe i can pay someone to do it for me
    save up
    till i can't anymore
    then give everything
    for someone to open that door
    for my hands its locked
    but i found the key
    now to find someone who cares none for me
    thats not hard
    look around and pick
    every person on earth
    would be glad to
    if i wasn't me
    i'd do it too
    lifes fucked up
    then we die
    so fuck this world and end this life




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      I'm terribly sorry that life sucks that much for you. Especially because I've been at that point. Recently.
    As far as dark poems go... it's damn good. It gets the point across eloquently and points out all the miserable, bleak, raining stops along the way. I can easily envision this in a poetry anthology.

    -Shadow
    | Posted on 2008-12-06 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]
      You have to be going through somthing terrible to be able to write somthing as deppressing and dark as this. I am sorry for anything that is hurting you so much, I have been here to.
    As for your writing, Its a true song, reminds me of a rap song, while I read it, I could like, hear some guy rappen it, and Its good. And while I read it, I felt pain of a person who was suffering, and it touched me, because I know my self what that pain feels like. It seems that so many people today are loosing hope in life. You poem really hits it hard on how people feel when life reaches that point.
    Well done.


    Grimm Reaper
    | Posted on 2008-10-11 00:00:00 | by grimmreaper | [ Reply to This ]


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