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    dots Submission Name: Your deathdots

    Author: StainedxBlades
    ASL Info:    23/f/ MA
    Elite Ratio:    1.76 - 8/13/24
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsYour deathdots

    Fagile impatience to never end this war i'm facing

    the tic-tocing of the clocks annoyance

    killing psycotic cells

    the face of this skeleton pouring blood

    to show affection for self worth

    pictures proclaiming captured souls

    given to the devil my slave driver

    stitch by stitch

    I peice my heart back together

    for you to bandage and love back to health

    eyes dripping blood onto my neck

    and down my starving body

    you must catch it in your cupped hands

    before it hits the floor

    the perfection of my painted face

    will haunt you till you die

    this hell surrounding enchains my mind

    but my soul is the maker of it all

    my tears crash down in the form of the rain

    the banchees screech glorifies my nature

    you wish for nirvana

    but inferno over powers

    this complexity is not in you comprehension

    what i'm trying to say is


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