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    dots Submission Name: NIGHT BLINDNESSdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 578
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 462



    Description:
       SUSPICOUS MIND MEDICATED MISTRUST HMMMM


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    dotsNIGHT BLINDNESSdots
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    I walk
    Back and forth
    In front of the window
    each car is yours
    Till it isnít
    Each minute slinks out ashamed
    Not again
    Head lights light the black kitchen
    For a moment I am lighter too
    They go
    Leaving just the night
    I bite my thumb
    Till I taste metal
    I go through lies in my head
    I make them for you
    That is what I do
    Because I love you




    Submitted on 2008-10-10 00:57:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What immediately caught my eye was the visual form your poem took corresponds to the image of walking back and forth. Uncertainty and a fear pervade throughout which captures the overall image well i think.
    | Posted on 2008-10-11 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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