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Submission Name: I breathe you in dots

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Author:	StainedxBlades
ASL Info:	19/f/ Mass
Elite Ratio:	1.76 - 8/13/24
Words:	73

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	104
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	476

Description:
this is to my girlfriend whom i love so much

I breathe you in dots

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the things i say
only cause you pain
the things i do
make me obtain
all the pain i inflict on your heart

The razor's kiss
looks oh so good
but i can't do it
I know i should
find a better way to deal

nothing else feels so good
(when your not there)
its like flirting with death
everything else hurts more
with every single breath
I breathe you in

Submitted on 2008-10-10 03:49:17 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
Call me crazy but I like this piece too.

Take your pen and draw a line in the sand.
stand there and dare that man to give you
his hand, look in his eyes and let him see you.

The Poor Man's Poet
| Posted on 2008-10-10 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]

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