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    dots Submission Name: this crazy lovedots
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    Author: StainedxBlades
    ASL Info:    19/f/ Mass
    Elite Ratio:    1.76 - 8/13/24
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 105
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 615



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    dotsthis crazy lovedots
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    I'll bleed for you
    if you want me to
    i'll die for you
    if you let me

    we both know
    it would be better that way
    you could be happy
    and i'd finally be okay

    I don't want to feel like this
    all I want is to please you
    but nothing ever works
    I cause pain and thats all i do

    I don't understand
    this love you hold
    and why you stay
    when i'm so cold

    please explain
    the way you feel
    cause i just don't see
    how this could be real




    Submitted on 2008-10-10 03:53:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I feel the power, the pleasure and the pain
    of this piece. Good write. good night.


    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2008-10-10 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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