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    dots Submission Name: Old Gamesdots

    Author: all2rest
    Elite Ratio:    3.75 - 30/40/34
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       I honestly don't know where this one came from......

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    dotsOld Gamesdots

    Thrilling is killing
    your spilling the feeling
    it's all over the table
    I know that your able
    but you're still looking back
    I'm going unstable

    your simple, secure
    but your thoughts are impure
    you say be faithful be grateful and honest
    look in my eyes
    you know that's beyond us

    don't stop running
    keep the world on repeat
    your soul is so bitter
    your lies are so sweet

    empty and hollow surrounded by friends
    a soul so alone
    you search to no end

    new faces new names
    new lovers new flames

    just keep playing all your old games

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      I like the style and content. One grammar mistake in a your as opposed to you're, I think. This is just fun to read, thanks!
    | Posted on 2010-06-14 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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