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    dots Submission Name: Just a Momentdots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.47 - 99/55/49
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 648
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1021



    Description:
       There a lot of my writings that are sad or heart aching so I tried to do this one a little different.


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    dotsJust a Momentdots
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    I sit listening to every thought
    That seems to pass loudly,
    As if the sound of shattering glass.

    She slid gracefully and quietly
    Disturbing nothing but my thoughts,
    Fiddling and confusing my heart
    As if talent was her life.

    Laying down
    Slipping my hands under my head,
    I started to draw
    Images of her upon the ceiling.

    I began
    Watching her eyes
    Feeling the time becoming lost
    And the world
    No longer in existents.

    The feeling of weightless came over
    Nothing holding me down
    And nothing holding me back.

    I felt capable of anything.

    Waking up
    Still resting upon her
    I realized the strength,
    Us as one,
    And what I would be without her.

    As if the stars of the heavens
    I hope she will always stay
    Always to light the way,
    And I in turn
    To keep her bright.




    Submitted on 2008-10-10 18:36:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I likes it, nice to see something other then sad poems (not like I can talk all of mine seem sad ) I really like this one, keep up the good work.

    ^_^

    ~ <3 ~ Nix ~ <3 ~
    | Posted on 2008-10-21 00:00:00 | by NixLacus | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice , Not as smoth as I like'em
    but very nice.


    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2008-10-10 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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