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    dots Submission Name: A Ghost From 1891dots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 1066/1177/572
    Words: 211
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsA Ghost From 1891dots
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    Her velvet garter held a bell,
    A tiny bell that when she strolled,
    Marked her a strumpet tall and bold
    With kisses and much more to sell.

    I paused upon the haunted street,
    Before the scarlet painted door,
    Met by this gorgeous paramour,
    Scant clothing very trim and neat.

    Her blue eyes each a haunted well,
    Wherein it seemed sleek Sirens lolled,
    With chatelaines and torques of gold.
    Once more I heard her tiny bell.

    She whispered things that made me blush.
    I saw her in a castle’s keep
    In chambers never meant for sleep,
    In scented bedrooms high and plush.

    Along the street a coach-and-four
    Made sparks against the cobble stone,
    I heard my lovely lady groan,
    I marked the coach’s odd décor.

    The driver’s head a grinning skull,
    His horses desperate for the run,
    Each one a wan grim skeleton,
    Chomping on their bits to pull.

    She turned to me and said “Farewell,
    My time is short, I must away,
    To that grim place beyond Death’s bay.
    Here, kindly keep my tiny bell.”

    Her blue eyes each a haunted well,
    Wherein it seemed sleek Sirens lolled,
    With chatelaines and torques of gold,
    Once more I heard her tiny bell.






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      This is marvelous! It is enchanting in its story, and perfect in structure and form! Just absolutely delightful with a fantastic ending!

    Three cheers for you, my able and talented friend!
    | Posted on 2008-10-10 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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