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    dots Submission Name: empty monologues become rational—dots

    Author: meoww
    Elite Ratio:    6.75 - 262/258/143
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    spin cycles.
    a kick in the nuts.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsempty monologues become rational—dots

    a history comprised of hazy saturdays
    on a couch four years ago, completely
    sold to the idea of

    disclosure. amongst the self telling you
    there is no god, apart from the one
    called i and ego and immersion

    in bottles. i sweep all of that up. focus
    on the outside of tunnels. spread each
    card, define what these planets

    mean in conjunction. it's all
    relative, it's been said. it's all ones
    and twos and the occasional

    unwanted three, set in motion,
    beyond turrets, under graves,
    and through seismic oceans filled

    with dying devotion: a thirsty
    madonna, a hopeless isis, a burnt
    wife of a disciple.

    Submitted on 2008-10-10 23:24:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think your poems read like a meditation. That it was it is, that thing which makes them so emotive evocative visceral honest fragile etcetcetc.

    That it was it is.

    Your page is like a lucky dip at the moment. It's rather cool.

    Big smile.

    I've been drinking so I won't bother trying to give a worthwhile comment. This will have to do.

    Aly x
    | Posted on 2009-09-29 00:00:00 | by AlyRose | [ Reply to This ]
      yes, guy... you do it well, so well I wished i hadn't restricted myself back to just this handle, because you deserve to be read and stalked.

    Sophisticated musing, that's how i'd label this... 'sold' was beautifully placed and your enjambment of lines and progression of thoughts.... ugh. You're a good writer, and their are quite a few around so don't be afraid to give me a kick in the ass to remind me of the goodness that is you.

    Fine poem.

    There, I said it!
    | Posted on 2009-05-11 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      Hello again.... and once again... a beautiful use of words

    "disclosure. amongst the self telling you
    there is no god, apart from the one
    called i and ego and immersion"

    ...and again poignant and real, earthy in its quality and again depicting a sense of tragedy, words written like this do not come from imagination alone, but from the life of the writer.... and isn't this the "other side" the "flip side" of poetry... that everything is not so "poetic" as to be romanticized into some eloquent verse, but is and should be; made real, depicted, made eternal in its one moment... poetry

    loved it !

    | Posted on 2008-10-15 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]
      what am I without words
    indolently reclining
    in my mind

    perhaps their callous
    air bears repeating
    then again

    the search derives
    its meaning from
    finding better ways

    to pass the time
    | Posted on 2008-10-11 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

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