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Submission Name:
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Author:
StainedxBlades
ASL Info:
19/f/ Mass
Elite Ratio:
1.76 - 8/13/24
Words:
353
Class/Type:
Poetry/Serious
Total Views:
93
Average Vote:
5.0000
Bytes:
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Description:
feelings i need out
untitled
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this pain i feel
from deep inside
i've tried so hard
but i can't hide
how i really feel
about anything anymore
it all comes out
you've opened that door
you might not like
what i have to say
but its all true
that much i can say
some things
just need to be said
cause bottling it up
makes me want to be dead
i say these things
just to let you know
i know they hurt
but i can't let it go
these feelings i have
that you never want to hear
i hold them inside
so close so near
don't tell me to talk
if you don't wanna listen
when i talk you want to cry
i can tell when your eyes glisten
you don't have to lie
when i ask you whats wrong
i ask cause i care
this to me is like a sad love song
i love you so much
these things you just need to know
if u don't start to listen to me
i might have to go
you know i'll be back
i could never leave you
even if i did want to
cause your the one who got me through
my suicidal ideations
come to me when you leave
i feel so lost
i can't even breathe
and i never want to
without you here
i'd rather die
my only real fear
your the one person
the one who makes me better
i told you the truth
when i wrote you those letters
you know its hard
for me to talk
to anyone
i'd rather walk
go so far away
drown myself in thoughts
of suicide
in my pre- picked spots
you don't listen
but still i try
again and again
i don't know why
maybe i should just shut up
and go away for ever
with no intent on return
but i could never
this is how i feel
please see that
sometime soon
or my heart might become flat
Submitted on 2008-10-11 03:14:11
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Once again I hardly know what to say. Reading it, I related so much it was almost as if i had written it. I feel as if we have so much in common, yet i harldy know you. Great job!
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