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    Author: StainedxBlades
    ASL Info:    19/f/ Mass
    Elite Ratio:    1.76 - 8/13/24
    Words: 353
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 93
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2256



    Description:
       feelings i need out


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    this pain i feel
    from deep inside
    i've tried so hard
    but i can't hide

    how i really feel
    about anything anymore
    it all comes out
    you've opened that door

    you might not like
    what i have to say
    but its all true
    that much i can say

    some things
    just need to be said
    cause bottling it up
    makes me want to be dead

    i say these things
    just to let you know
    i know they hurt
    but i can't let it go

    these feelings i have
    that you never want to hear
    i hold them inside
    so close so near

    don't tell me to talk
    if you don't wanna listen
    when i talk you want to cry
    i can tell when your eyes glisten

    you don't have to lie
    when i ask you whats wrong
    i ask cause i care
    this to me is like a sad love song

    i love you so much
    these things you just need to know
    if u don't start to listen to me
    i might have to go

    you know i'll be back
    i could never leave you
    even if i did want to
    cause your the one who got me through

    my suicidal ideations
    come to me when you leave
    i feel so lost
    i can't even breathe

    and i never want to
    without you here
    i'd rather die
    my only real fear

    your the one person
    the one who makes me better
    i told you the truth
    when i wrote you those letters

    you know its hard
    for me to talk
    to anyone
    i'd rather walk

    go so far away
    drown myself in thoughts
    of suicide
    in my pre- picked spots

    you don't listen
    but still i try
    again and again
    i don't know why

    maybe i should just shut up
    and go away for ever
    with no intent on return
    but i could never

    this is how i feel
    please see that
    sometime soon
    or my heart might become flat







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      Once again I hardly know what to say. Reading it, I related so much it was almost as if i had written it. I feel as if we have so much in common, yet i harldy know you. Great job!
    | Posted on 2008-10-16 00:00:00 | by dthforeverpain8 | [ Reply to This ]


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