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    dots Submission Name: Ghost in the Riggingdots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 1039/1113/532
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
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    dots Ghost in the Riggingdots
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    So long ago the cold spume stung my face
    Before the bowsprit as we plied the seas,
    From Singapore onto the Hebrides,
    Though now a ghost I no more can embrace
    The raging storm, the iron battle mace.
    I am invincible to such as these,
    My hair unruffled by a midnight breeze
    No more to feel my lover’s frilly lace.

    Yet sometimes when the North East wind I hear
    Run through the rigging on a Christmas Eve,
    And on the decks the stir of living men,
    My silver eyes will shed an icy tear,
    It’s then my heart of vapor will believe
    That this pale ghost may one day live again.




    Submitted on 2008-10-11 06:40:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aaah, a ghostly spirit and the sea! Excellent fodder for verse, and this one is delightful, as all of your work is! The idea of a ghost longing to live again is novel, and adds depth and drama to the poem. Very nicely done, my talented friend!
    | Posted on 2008-10-11 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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