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    dots Submission Name: Don't need a reasondots
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    Author: Shadow24968
    ASL Info:    16 Male
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 69/72/34
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 510
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1194



    Description:
       A song to a very special woman I know


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    dotsDon't need a reasondots
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    My eyes, seeing the truth of you
    Seeing the divinity
    Blinded by obsceneties
    Why don't you believe me?
    You're the only thing I want
    And the best I'll ever get

    Chorus
    I don't need a reason
    I can't tell you why
    All I need is you in my life
    With all my heart
    You're my desire

    Your eyes, The definition of beauty
    Seeing you tonight
    Such a wonderful sight
    Your body glazes in the moonlight
    Amazing excitement for one night
    I need you forever in paradise

    Chorus
    I don't need a reason
    I can't tell you why
    All I need is you in my life
    With all my heart
    You're my desire

    You're the world to me
    Why can't you see
    You're my trophy
    My longest loved memory

    Chorus x2
    I don't need a reason
    I can't tell you why
    All I need is you in my life
    With all my heart
    You're my desire

    You're my world
    My dreams
    My living loving fantasy




    Submitted on 2008-10-11 21:20:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It was very good! And better than interesting some can't see good work.
    It flows purfectly and it has a good story behind the words I can feel the emotions...
    It reminded me of my first love.....
    LOL!!!!!!!

    TOTOJANE
    | Posted on 2009-08-22 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]
      okk

    this was good but not too interesting.

    the flow was awesome and you kept a constant theme so all good there
    i also liked the random rhyming. i dont know if that was done on purpose or not but it was neat how you did it.

    you seem so confident in it. :)

    trry to make it a tidge more origional. try to find a different way to say the same thing. make it your own.
    peace.
    | Posted on 2008-10-14 00:00:00 | by annie smith | [ Reply to This ]


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