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    dots Submission Name: Isis in the Smokedots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 473
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsIsis in the Smokedots
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    Isis in the Smoke

    A hush has rested this quiet afternoons sunless wing
    While his thoughts hang on a trembling tip between nowhere and knowing
    And the flowers in his garden drip diamond drops of rain
    The cool wet darken colours suffuse the window pane

    As from his frozen fingers smoking drifts
    The quietude is humming mute words that breathing softly gives
    A curling pathway carrying so many memories
    To the vacant love inside his eyes sent to another moments kiss

    While the tapping rhythm of the sky dusts day to fallen dusk
    These mysteries of living have perceived some other or another gentle task
    The ghost of a soft bewitching smile calls once more to his heart
    And his dreams are born by a sighing only her touching could impart

    As a thundering roll echoes to lightning skies when the silence broke
    Through the wafting layers and spiralling vines of blue grey drifting smoke
    He espies the passages and the fields where only the lonely talk
    Calling him once again to the place and time where only Angels walk

    The room has slipped from dim to sheltered dark
    While his breath in a cloud forms a ghostly unspoken remark
    He raises the glowing ember to remind him of the time
    To when all his love had a language in the vision in her body and her mind

    No voice has uttered through the day the name that lay burning in his throat
    From the dark and from all the stars fashioned a velvet shaded cloak
    Which he swept about her naked shoulders in a universal flight
    But from his dreams her pale form danced throughout the suffusing night

    In the warmth of her arms he raised his soul and to her breast he lay the word
    Her hair became his shadow his eyes became her smile and their name was once more heard
    In a proclamation of a silence where lovers sometime walk
    And so entwined they where carried to the time and place where only Angels talk

    As suns wing lightens upon the shaft of a burgeoning morning
    He swore by all that is sacred and by all his love he heard a distant laughing
    And a garden filled with the green of flowers ignites his waking eye
    Isis languished in the dazzled window pane with a smile he could not deny

    As a thundering roll brings lightning skies to where the silence broke
    Through the wafting layers and spiralling vines of blue grey drifting smoke
    He espies the passages and the fields where only the lonely walk
    Calling him once again to the place and time where only Angels talk







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