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    dots Submission Name: The Betrayal of Love Last Foreverdots
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    Author: col13x
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    dotsThe Betrayal of Love Last Foreverdots
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    The Betrayal of Love Last Forever

    Someone other than me has held you
    I knew
    Some one other than me has touched you
    Has seen you
    And though I have never entered on this betrayal
    Still I loved you

    Someone has tasted what was mine
    Someone other than me
    Has invaded this singular gift of love
    And left this rape in my heart
    To remind me
    That only I have seen
    What I have seen
    But not only I have been
    Where I have been
    Naked in your naked arms

    His caresses on your skin
    Are scratches in my head
    Never healing
    And somewhere youíre combined and heavy breathing
    Creates a choke
    And a rip in my mind
    Though forgiving has long since brought its balm
    And heeling has extended me
    Her gentle tending calm
    To think that I new him and he new me
    And to think you were both so ready
    Fires a passage through my thoughts
    An unbidden spasm of mental cramp

    And I love you now as I ever did
    But I find I have not forgotten
    Through all these years
    The hurt still echoes
    An aching ghost in my throat
    And still I love you
    Yet there is no test for the endurance of that love
    There are no words
    To describe well enough
    What you meant to me
    And what you did to me

    So I would rather not have
    Than have to live dishonestly
    I donít think you will ever know
    What your confessions destroyed in me
    I donít think you will ever understand
    The blood in the scar of that memory
    So truth is better for the honesty
    And a lie is a patch which peels eventually

    I loved you
    And am and was incapable of anything else
    And I know what love involves
    But I hate the reminder and its memory
    And I am glad of the time
    And for the time
    That never brought you back to me
    I loved you
    I am in love with you
    Perhaps more than I choose to be
    Perhaps more than is and was good for me






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