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    dots Submission Name: The Mechanics of Rapedots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Mechanics of Rapedots
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    The Mechanics of Rape

    Sedated
    Opiated
    Entertained
    Disinherited
    Dehumanised
    And detained

    Sophisticated
    Berated
    Intoxicated
    Despiritualised
    Copulated
    Emancipated
    And capitalised

    Communicated
    Raped
    Debated
    And civilised
    Deviated
    Conbobulated
    Over rated
    Desensitised
    Over ride

    Masticated
    Digested
    Advertised
    And sterilised
    Deodorised
    And addicted
    De sexualised
    Decaffeinated
    Belated
    Urinated
    Defecated
    Duped
    And odorised

    Stagnated
    Masturbated
    Institutionalised
    And plagiarised
    Degraded
    Humiliated
    And mortified
    Incarcerated
    Suffocated
    Impersonalised
    Uninspired
    Subjugated
    And penetrated
    Exploited
    And procrastinated

    Such is the state of the twentieth century human

    Demoralised
    Infected
    And you know when you need comfort
    Someone to talk to
    You have someone
    We have know one
    When you need emotion
    Joy or pain
    There is someone
    To help you
    To listen
    We have no one
    When your dreams inspire you
    Or life just drags at you
    When you need to talk
    Or a kiss
    Or a hug
    You have someone
    We have no one

    Do you understand
    The mechanics of rape




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      I'm not sure I do. Understand. This is quite forceful. In the way I would imagine an actual rape might make a person feel. I guess once I arrived at the part about twentieth century men it almost sounds like an excuse? I'm hoping not.
    Interesting.

    Erica
    | Posted on 2008-10-15 00:00:00 | by grey | [ Reply to This ]
      i think your meaing is lost on some i didnt get the feel of the victim in this at as some did i guess i felt he empathy of teh man the victim is rapped by a victim i think i get it eitehr way i like =d it i love the word usage that often escapes me in my work .layD
    | Posted on 2008-10-14 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes...I do understand rape, quite well infact. You've done beautifully with this peice, I'm sure it will help many like me. To me poetry is like communication...it reaches out to other's that may share similar experiances. I'm glad you wrote this, it's going to do good for a lot of people that read it. BRAVO!
    Dominique
    | Posted on 2008-10-13 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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