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    dots Submission Name: Stilldots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Still

    Quiet in emptiness
    will not fill
    reach out to feel
    but still
    a space in you
    won’t fill

    Do you know how it feels

    Where or when
    in a crumpled bag of steel
    reaching in to reach out and……………….feel
    but still emptiness will not yield
    silence will not fill

    Do you know how that feels

    Words hang on edges of tongue
    words to say to someone
    but still emptiness will not spill
    its silent secrets or reveal
    why emptiness refuses to feel

    Do you know how this feels

    Some where and nowhere
    between worlds squealing on the edge
    demanding you feel
    but still emptiness
    invades with its fullness
    you reach out to touch
    make contact
    but with nothing
    reaching nothing
    but emptiness

    A crumpling paper bag
    contains a space compressed into nothingness
    quiet in emptiness
    will not fill
    reaching out to feel
    but still
    space in you
    still won’t heal
    emptiness

    I know you know how this feels




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      This was written very well. I loved it.
    | Posted on 2008-10-12 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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