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    dots Submission Name: fountains, fields, visionsdots

    Author: meoww
    Elite Ratio:    6.75 - 262/258/143
    Words: 292
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsfountains, fields, visionsdots

    me, i'm jasmine and clover honey
    rooted to the idea of tragedy
    being a jaded ruby slipper.

    she found the lucky land
    whisked back
    and found
    all sorts of redemption—
    violet, the colour of wind upon tongues
    hushed and soft, genie brilliance
    whisked, whisked egg-battered whites
    and sunrises telling me
    i'm such a dreamer,
    a flagrant, fragrant dreamer

    too caught up
    in why
    one size fits all
    never fits quite right,
    too believing
    of brown-nosed strangers
    poking sticks and stones
    and filthy promises
    into my hands.

    i don't believe them now.
    i found sanctity
    in the cathedral of my belly.
    i found a gravel road
    and decided
    it needed spraying
    with gypsies
    gaping wide, smiling
    as if their jeans would burst
    and turn scarlet
    from loving and laughing
    so damn hard.

    and that's what i want: magic and energy
    to tell me i am jasmine and clover honey
    searching for other fields, searching for grass
    to lay my head upon, my stalks
    and shadows and petals
    and dandelion crowns
    to graze upon
    my version
    of a violet

    i believe in different meanings of essence.
    in the totality of infinite. in the reasoning
    of the obscure, art-fucked tendencies
    found in intellectuals, hobo musos
    and junked-up hookers
    searching, searching

    you'll find it, i'm sure.
    arcs and circles, arcs and circles.

    hold my hands.

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    ||| Comments |||
      Nah. But each line is magnificent. Make a poem for each line. Let them be about something ... not everything ... May it take you the rest of your life.
    | Posted on 2009-06-04 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      'never fits quite right'

    what about -

    never quite fits right

    (just a flow thing).

    hope lurks in the strangest of corners and sometimes in words that find places to land - making poems on occasion. I like that this is out of the box and colorful and food fed somehow. It feels barefooted and free like there is a knowing as texture touches skin telling you you are alive; or maybe reminding you to go around the bend.
    | Posted on 2008-11-03 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
      ......... and now I am at a loss to describe, anything, or give anything in words to say what reading these poems have brought to me...................

    kindred spirit of a different world.........
    | Posted on 2008-10-15 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi J .... thanks for the 'heads up' ! i'm glad i found this one .. even if it is 1.10 am and i am dog tired . always a real pleasure to read the streams of consciousness that flow out of your head ....bfn j
    | Posted on 2008-10-14 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]

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