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    dots Submission Name: Phantasmadots
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    Author: lovedeathsdeath
    ASL Info:    20/M/NCUSA
    Elite Ratio:    5.28 - 39/43/33
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 117
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    dotsPhantasmadots
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    One more time
    One more moment
    One more place
    One more memory

    to place in the past
    is being recalled in
    the present.
    Thank you for being
    here with me in this
    once more.

    Goodbye is not
    what I need
    to hear this time
    so Ill replay
    all of the time before
    I faded from your eyes
    and your life faded from mine.



    I'm using my fingers
    to try to breathe in the
    air that keeps me alive.
    But that same
    air was not sufficent for you.

    Goodbye is not
    what I wanted
    to say just when
    you fell through
    my grasp.

    One more memory
    one more place
    one more moment
    one more time
    that I watch you die.




    Submitted on 2008-10-12 02:52:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is......very, very good and very, very emotional. I love this poem. It describes loss and love VERY well, almost perfectly in my opinion. I notice that this poem is written under the subject of death, so I'm VERY sorry for whoever you lost. It must have been someone you cared for a lot, because this poem is VERY emotional and I can feel the sadness and regret when I read it. I love the feeling you put in when you wrote about replaying all the memories in your head about them. That is very true when you lose someone, and you did a perfect job of portraying that. This is a great poem, and it's another fav add.
    | Posted on 2008-10-19 00:00:00 | by FlickerofHope | [ Reply to This ]



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