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    dots Submission Name: just words...dots

    Author: TSTCTC
    ASL Info:    18/M/IN
    Elite Ratio:    3.59 - 61/87/51
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    sublime in these moments of solace,
    cut deep by the pain of a lost minute,
    turned cold from within,
    your lungs begin to freeze.
    you remember that its not what it couldve been,
    lesser than knowing that nothing is content within the limitations of the mind.
    i gather a bundle of dead branches within my hands and toss them to the ground,
    breaking corners of childhood memories that have no place within the depths of a mortal malice.
    skin rots,
    feelings do to,
    but sessions of light that verbirate a holy fold build within themselves to manage a guidiness.
    to capture a single sight of lashing greatness will leave nothing.
    burnt into the ground are markings of elder saints,
    waiting for a describition of their sailing ship.
    bound for new lands to soil.
    to wreck.
    to wreck.
    fouls cry.
    souls burn in hell.
    still rotting their physical self,
    they burn from diease and wounds
    that heal only just,
    letting the sinners know that their exsistence is one of pain?

    Submitted on 2008-10-13 02:57:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This seems to be something about humans not being attentive to human misery therefore causing misery to make their misery seem as the norm. There is a throwing down of gathered branches not lit for one's self but gladly lit for one not of one's frienship. There shall surely come the day when the thoughts of all souls shall be revealed. Then shall be seen that an equation has two sides, one on each side of the equal mark. And all shall know on which side one belongs.
    | Posted on 2008-10-13 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      My Friend I dont think I have read any of your writings before but I am so Sorry about that right now
    This is a write that I find to be a classic
    This is so emotional and immediately draws me to my own plight in life
    I was lost with nothing absolutely nothing not to mention I was an addict at the time as well so I even lost my will
    Now that Im going on almost 4 years sober I can easilly reflect on just how far Ive come and this write definately reminded me of that
    The line of picking up dead branches and throwing them to the ground was absolutely perfect
    To me that reflected on a life that could have been or just how quickly life passes us by
    I am easilly making this a favorite
    As you can see I have commented on a tremendous amount of writes but my Friend I am not ashamed to say this write is one of the best I have ever read
    Tremendous Job!!!!!!!
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2008-10-13 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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