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    dots Submission Name: my first love poemdots
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    Author: vohomegirl
    ASL Info:    28 and at the gate...
    Elite Ratio:    6.83 - 314/191/78
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 56
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 949



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       hehe.... i'm in love...


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    dotsmy first love poemdots
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    what is this divine
    moonlight setting
    for wettings
    and letting
    dreams come true...

    gastronomical portions
    severed down
    and boiled
    in a pot

    a sweet italian dish
    delicious
    and laced lovely
    with love and dew
    in an intimate stew

    and you.

    it is just the lonely
    longing to hear a sigh
    and a cry so sweet
    that only girls can do

    after the rain
    the little birds sang
    a melody that brought
    the bloom and soon
    the last of winter
    will melt and drip
    off our finger
    tips

    O' when spring comes--
    a newly hatched feathered friend
    we will know that this is the end
    of our lives, when a new season
    begins

    but what does it matter

    we are in love.






    Submitted on 2008-10-13 03:45:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      first of all...congratulations!! Being in love is an amazing feeling stronger than any other on the planet. It has driven men to start wars, to murder their brothers, to write the most beautiful sonnets in the world. It was refreshing to see a love poem that did not have all the elements you would usually expect in one.

    Great work,

    Corbin
    | Posted on 2008-10-14 00:00:00 | by Lostlover | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this...

    I like the rhyme and reason and beat...
    but it is not overdone, or burnt.

    at first I wasn't sure about the 'gastronomical' but it works here.

    not sure what else to say except that I like it... and ummmm good for you.

    I wish the world were in love... seems most people are nicer when they are.

    Loving is a long haul, the trick is to find pieces of being in love throughout... finding that magic. Keeping it alive.






    | Posted on 2008-10-13 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]



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