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    dots Submission Name: Everyone = Nonedots
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    Author: The Wolverine
    ASL Info:    23/M/MA
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 74/137/91
    Words: 255
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 642
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1727



    Description:
       im at work and i just started writing, any and all comments are appreciated!!

    (if you're familiar with the band Bush they heavily influenced this esp. the "everyone and none" part because in "Swallowed" he says "im with everyone and yet not"_


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    dotsEveryone = Nonedots
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    ain't no costume party
    but i got my mask
    a crowded room
    music full blast

    even in dead quiet
    won't hear a thing
    don't even want to
    hear my phone ring

    dying inside
    in the prime of life
    cast aside
    tumbled like dice
    always come up snake eyes
    venomous bite

    i dont want want to stun
    but before this is done
    let's make one thing crystal clear
    with everyone and none

    dont ask me why
    'cuz i don't know
    planted seeds of doubt
    are sure to grow
    can't say for sure
    if or why im here

    going down in sea for one
    it's too late
    the undertow has won

    partys over
    people filter out
    musics off
    nothin's changed
    same as before

    aint no costume party but i wore my mask
    never take it off, hate when you ask
    couldn't hear a thing
    and i don't mind
    without you im just killing time

    loaded or empty, it's all the same
    couldn't pick myself up
    and im to blame
    because when you lock yourself away
    you keep your lips from what they need to say

    in the H.O.V. lane to hell
    if you gotta go then you might as well
    bring someone alone
    for the ride
    cuz on the road of life
    every one will die

    forget that mask
    go out tonight
    make amends
    try and make it right
    get yourself up off the ground
    forgive and live, it all comes 'round





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      Wow. I know that i havent been on here lately to comment on your works. Sorry. Anyways, I really really like this one. I like the flow of it. And I know the band Bush. Theyre to awesome. Anyways, I like how you can tell in the beginning that supposedly it is ment to be a metaphor for some type of love. And in the end, I love how you can tell them that they can do what they want pretending to be who they want. Really good. Thisis going on my favs! Nice job!

    Annie
    | Posted on 2009-01-22 00:00:00 | by unnamedtear | [ Reply to This ]


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