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The Pitch and the Pale


Author: Voodoo_Lounge
ASL Info:    21/F/OH
Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 408 /588 /171
Words: 30
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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The Pitch and the Pale



Stumbling through
The pitch and the pale,
Is rapidly beginning
To grow very stale.
I press forward-
While you pull back.
My blissful little world
Is turning far too black.




Submitted on 2008-10-13 17:34:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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