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    dots Submission Name: I think....dots
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    Author: Lil gal
    ASL Info:    32/F-ya/here
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 355/216/36
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Serious
    Total Views: 716
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 330



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       It's not much, but I wrote it awhile back, thought I should post something. Well, let me know what you think.


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    dotsI think....dots
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    A soul is like a broken vase, when it's whole you don't see that it can easily crack and fracture, but once you do see the vase fall and the pieces litter the ground in fragments, you understand how fragile it was; now the shards are picked up and arranged and placed back in order, but alas, the vase is never the same.




    Submitted on 2008-10-14 03:41:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yeah works well. to the point. although broken vase would make more sense as vase/ imo. toodles.
    | Posted on 2015-07-08 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      I, too, thought this was an apt illustration.

    However, I think you should start off with the soul is a vase, not a broken vase. And when the shards are put back together, it's still a vase, but broken and never quite the same.

    That's just one man's opinion, though. Still, as requested, those were my thoughts on the matter.

    It's good to see you back,
    The Bird
    | Posted on 2008-10-31 00:00:00 | by Swimming Bird | [ Reply to This ]
      very short, but at the same time tells so much about how life is.
    i like it, i guess due to the fact that it relates to everyone and everything.
    glad to see your back!

    -Aaron
    | Posted on 2008-10-23 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]
       I LIKED THIS GOOD WORK SHORT SWEET AND THOUGHT OUT I LOVE THAT ..LAYD
    | Posted on 2008-10-14 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]
      Happy Day girl!!! Nice to see you back too I've been out almost all summer & just getting back to writing/posting.

    I like how you illustrate how fragile we are as people. I think this piece was minimalistic but very expressive and a little bit sad.

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-10-14 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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