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hypnotizing plea

Author: lynn marsters
ASL Info:    20/f/canada
Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 49 /61 /32
Words: 48
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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hypnotizing plea

Lips are parted
Just a little
A tantalizing tease

Silent whispers
Motionless tremors
A shaking in her knees

Unconscious sighs
A dream like stare
A subtle silent freeze

I’ll see you Monday
A gentle hypnotizing plea
Intoxicated by the moment
She humbly agrees

Submitted on 2008-10-14 05:04:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  oh very nice. I liekd this a lot the imagery was great could see them both standing in a crowded hallway but from their view completely empty to world it's just a kiss but to her it's so much more. Well i dont know if thats wat u were going for but thats wat i got out of it anyways great job.

| Posted on 2008-10-14 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]

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