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    dots Submission Name: hypnotizing pleadots
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    Author: lynn marsters
    ASL Info:    20/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 49/61/32
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotshypnotizing pleadots
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    Lips are parted
    Just a little
    A tantalizing tease

    Silent whispers
    Motionless tremors
    A shaking in her knees

    Unconscious sighs
    A dream like stare
    A subtle silent freeze

    I’ll see you Monday
    A gentle hypnotizing plea
    Intoxicated by the moment
    She humbly agrees




    Submitted on 2008-10-14 05:04:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh very nice. I liekd this a lot the imagery was great could see them both standing in a crowded hallway but from their view completely empty to world it's just a kiss but to her it's so much more. Well i dont know if thats wat u were going for but thats wat i got out of it anyways great job.

    ~Luvy~
    | Posted on 2008-10-14 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]


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