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    dots Submission Name: In the Shade of Half Eclipsedots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsIn the Shade of Half Eclipsedots

    In the Shade of Half Eclipse


    Portent breathing

    Light diffuse
    Scattering bird song


    Indrawn momentum
    She held

    Prophecy by hands cling
    To premonition

    Light fading
    Dispersal of half moon shadow
    Reaped by tufted grass

    So hushed………………………………………..

    Encumbered by trepidation
    Shade deepening

    Held by half eclipse
    Nature freed by expectations darkness

    Half moon shadow
    Half moon light

    Unveiled the fairy land

    Submitted on 2008-10-14 17:10:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Dark and powerful. I found myself getting chills as I read this. It captures the spirit of a solar eclipse perfectly-that of the entire world gathered around, staring at the sky in awe.

    Moments like those make you wonder what else there is out there. Or even what our own 'verse (universe), or even what Earth, is hiding from us. If this world which depends on light can have a part of it thrown into such darkness, then nothing can be impossible.
    | Posted on 2008-11-02 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is one that spoke to me. There is ballance and a reminder here that what we don't see is often every bit as real as what we do.

    Although I've been accused of using few words, this is a piece where I'd like to think that I'd have added a little more, to possibly flesh it out just a little bit.

    For instance, making it clear that it is a solar eclipse and not a lunar eclips earlier in the piece than half way through might be a helpful clarification.

    Thank you for sharing, though
    | Posted on 2008-10-16 00:00:00 | by thepowerglider | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed this piece as "IT" reminded me of some of my expressions and pieces that people often discount as "not poetic".

    I love the minimalism in verbiage yet visual and mental impact.

    My own feelings can find reflection here and that, to me, is what "IT", is ALL about...sharing.

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-10-15 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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