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    dots Submission Name: Sky-Eater Conjunct c. by ruejacobs 10/13/08 3 a.m.dots
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    Author: ruejacobs
    ASL Info:    37/feminazi/Gehenna
    Elite Ratio:    4.91 - 566/440/154
    Words: 231
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsSky-Eater Conjunct c. by ruejacobs 10/13/08 3 a.m.dots
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    So came the Father
    In the year of the Father
    Sacred, yes, but veiled in Shadow
    As dark and as stern as Saturn

    I have known the Self-Proud Zeus
    And the substitute Tanist King
    I have lain in Bacchic forests
    Well-f**ked and drunk with desire
    My flesh has been conquered

    Indelible marks stain my surface
    A lash for every word I spoke
    Well, didn’t I give as good as I got?
    I have spoken the tongue of the Seraphim
    And still not one could claim my soul

    So came the Father
    In the year of the Father
    And when that year had passed away
    Saturn yet remained
    Did I not truthfully say
    That the Archer’s bow
    Would dethrone them all?

    I have had many consorts
    Yet I have but one Master
    As Oedipus limped surely to his grave
    So, too, did I swallow the Cronos’ Stone
    And Gods digest within me now
    How they writhe beneath my skin
    I could only ever hear his voice
    As constant as the planetary pull

    My magnetic opposite
    My one true north
    As distant, as cold as that star
    Veiled with iron and bitter in my mouth

    I am in is orbit even now
    Balanced in this celestial dance
    My Ophion, my Dragon Prince
    The push and the pull
    Of a steller and digital dome




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       I like this, but I cannot say why. It has the feeling of deepness, and is in fact written beautifully. -- However it also has that... how do I say... feeling that you are either trying too hard or trying to talk over the heads of your audience. Most of the references I at lest mostly understood, but the very last line fall flat for me because I don't understand the tie in.

    I also am wondering if when you speak of the "Father" if you mean GOD the Trinity (Father, Son, Holy Ghost) or if you speak of some other deity?
    | Posted on 2008-10-14 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ]


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