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    dots Submission Name: MEMORYdots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    I was brilliant color
    I was vibrant song
    Swaying dancer
    Laughter echoing
    A smile you loved
    I am gray
    I am little whisper
    Corner hider
    Drowning tears
    Eyes you killed
    Where did I go
    How did I allow it

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