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    dots Submission Name: RIVERdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsRIVERdots
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    Always the water
    After the pain
    There is always the scolding
    Its what washes it all away
    Makes me angel again
    turns the skin pink
    Till it peels
    Till the numbness comes
    The only part I learned to like
    At least the only part I admitted too
    The ritual
    I still carry out
    When the memory strikes
    I am pulled back now by Ericís eyes
    But once upon a time it was only the water
    the steam
    The welcomed burning




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