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    dots Submission Name: FLASHBACK WHIPLASHdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    25/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 246/236/131
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 111
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    A drug induced had made it all possible
    Made me able to live past the pain
    It left behind distortion though
    Reality twisted
    Turned on itself
    Became someplace different
    An entire secret world
    It washes over me like a great dark wave
    Bringing those familiar colors
    Purple and blue and green
    It crushes out the light
    your eyes become his
    Deep black and brown
    till I cant recall their shade of blue
    Your face ripples
    Your hands on my neck
    His hands on my neck
    I fight it
    Reach out
    I know you
    Are you there
    I know if I can make myself see you
    Force myself to recognize
    Then I can come home
    Please god don’t leave me here




    Submitted on 2008-10-14 17:34:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A drug induced what? The first line does not make sense. The whole poem feels really disjointed. If you wrote it when you were high on L or something it's ok. But yeah, don't use drugs as a mean of escape, it will bite you in the ass eventually as you will get in a state like this and you will have to really face your worst fears. If this was a first time experience don't get scared, women in general have a bad trip the first time they take something new...
    | Posted on 2008-10-16 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]



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