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    dots Submission Name: Line on My Armdots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.47 - 99/55/49
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsLine on My Armdots
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    My eyes
    Drifting in an empty room
    Where the walls are spinning
    Searching for nothing but darkness
    My mind
    Trying to crawl away
    From images bathing in my blood
    Leaving me
    Crippling as it burns under my skin
    Tearing open the hate
    Eating me out of my head
    Left to be insane
    Waiting to be dead

    I lay eyes wide open
    Staring at the ceiling
    Trying to count the beats of my heart
    Thatís not even there
    Feeling the breath of a silver blade
    Begin to kiss across my skin
    Nothing but red tears
    Falling just before me
    Anger pouring from my veins
    Nothing left but lines on my arm
    And the pain that is no more

    Theyíre scars of empty open wounds
    Holding nothing worth living for
    Rotten words unspoken leaves me broken
    No more love for me anymore
    Itís just lines on my arm
    Theyíre just lines on my arm

    My heart lays in so many pieces
    I canít put it back together
    Escaping reasons that I need to be alive
    Left shredded on the floor
    Now I donít know how to live anymore
    Itís just lines on my arm
    Theyíre just lines on my arm





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      Aren't you a bit old to be emo? I never like this kind of stuff. If you are really doing it. STOP IT! Those lines on the arm look disgusting and they will only show other people that you are weak and nothing more...
    | Posted on 2008-10-16 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the imagery here but i got a bit lost (not hard to do i am blonde) it is about a cutter right ?i wasnt sure if that wqs it or if teh blade thing was an analogy sorry but i liked it none the less good work sorry im dumb..layD
    | Posted on 2008-10-15 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]


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