To Make a Point by NovemberInferno

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Submission Name: To Make a Point dots

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Author:	NovemberInferno
ASL Info:	18/F/Indiana
Elite Ratio:	5.67 - 3/4/3
Words:	126

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	144
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	971

Description:
A musing on writing with an explicit purpose in mind opposed to writing completely free of intention-an evolution of writing

To Make a Point dots

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In cursive fluidity
Pens paint a mosaic
Of Letters

Without pre-meditation
We end the point
Period.

The period is the muzzle
The captor of free thought
The prison of prose

We should be damned
To be dammed
Behind a wall of dots

A river of ebony
Impregnates the mind
Our child of everything
And nothing

A shadow bulges
Within the infested tumor
One-thoused buzzing beatles carry
An idealist's disease

The water breaks
A million thought-up thoughts
Preemptive crosswords to cross
Smear and blend
Into one melted mass

Always wondered, always thought
If periods were to perish
If points concieved remained unmade
How dreadful, how beautiful
The black chaos would consume
The blank canvas of free thought

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  Absolutely wonderful, such imagery, what an inspiration! I've not read something like this in a long time. Free thought,.... the beauty in the mind is that it does not fill up, and the ink never runs out. Great work, Kudos!
~BeautifullyCorrupt
| Posted on 2009-09-25 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]
  Impressive!

I don't think I had the chance to read something quite like this before. You have an excellent sense of expression and intrigue. Your line of thought makes the reader excited and makes the experience an adventurous one. Since you're new here, I'm even more satisfied because it seems to me this site has just been enriched with another talent. A favorite for sure! :)
| Posted on 2008-10-19 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
  This is great!

I like that in the very beginning you use the period and then after that there is no punctuation; like the thought/thoughts haven't ended.

'We should be damned
To be dammed
Behind a wall of dots'

I love this. The rhytmn of it. I tend to like repetition if it isn't overbearing.

'A river of ebony
Impregnates the mind
Our child of everything
And nothing'

This too, because I feel the same, or at least to me, sometimes there is this place of everything and nothing at all... like it is all combined in some weird way expanding out into the everythingness into the nothingness of it all.

Actually, there is something about each stanza that I enjoy, connect to, feel for, understand.

ohhh.... and 'One-thousand buzzing beatles'

what an image... I can hear it.

hmmmm.

just unspecified ramblings...

I enjoyed. Thank you for the words.

| Posted on 2008-10-16 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]

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