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    dots Submission Name: To Make a Pointdots
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    Author: NovemberInferno
    ASL Info:    20/F/Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 3/7/6
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       A musing on writing with an explicit purpose in mind opposed to writing completely free of intention-an evolution of writing


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    dotsTo Make a Pointdots
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    In cursive fluidity
    Pens paint a mosaic
    Of Letters

    Without pre-meditation
    We end the point
    Period.

    The period is the muzzle
    The captor of free thought
    The prison of prose

    We should be damned
    To be dammed
    Behind a wall of dots

    A river of ebony
    Impregnates the mind
    Our child of everything
    And nothing

    A shadow bulges
    Within the infested tumor
    One-thoused buzzing beatles carry
    An idealist's disease

    The water breaks
    A million thought-up thoughts
    Preemptive crosswords to cross
    Smear and blend
    Into one melted mass

    Always wondered, always thought
    If periods were to perish
    If points concieved remained unmade
    How dreadful, how beautiful
    The black chaos would consume
    The blank canvas of free thought




    Submitted on 2008-10-16 06:55:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Absolutely wonderful, such imagery, what an inspiration! I've not read something like this in a long time. Free thought,.... the beauty in the mind is that it does not fill up, and the ink never runs out. Great work, Kudos!
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    | Posted on 2009-09-25 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]
      Impressive!

    I don't think I had the chance to read something quite like this before. You have an excellent sense of expression and intrigue. Your line of thought makes the reader excited and makes the experience an adventurous one. Since you're new here, I'm even more satisfied because it seems to me this site has just been enriched with another talent. A favorite for sure! :)
    | Posted on 2008-10-19 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      This is great!

    I like that in the very beginning you use the period and then after that there is no punctuation; like the thought/thoughts haven't ended.

    'We should be damned
    To be dammed
    Behind a wall of dots'

    I love this. The rhytmn of it. I tend to like repetition if it isn't overbearing.

    'A river of ebony
    Impregnates the mind
    Our child of everything
    And nothing'

    This too, because I feel the same, or at least to me, sometimes there is this place of everything and nothing at all... like it is all combined in some weird way expanding out into the everythingness into the nothingness of it all.

    Actually, there is something about each stanza that I enjoy, connect to, feel for, understand.

    ohhh.... and 'One-thousand buzzing beatles'

    what an image... I can hear it.

    hmmmm.

    just unspecified ramblings...

    I enjoyed. Thank you for the words.



    | Posted on 2008-10-16 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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