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    dots Submission Name: The Taunt and Mockery of Waterdots
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    Author: col13x
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    Words: 280
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    dotsThe Taunt and Mockery of Waterdots
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    The Taunt and Mockery of Water

    This desert has no other relationship to offer
    Nothing but the dry ache of its thirst
    And though its heat is enough to warm cold bones
    Still the chill of its relentless dunes
    Leaves the parched winds grip in the empty

    Footprints before footsteps
    In their circles wander
    And return at sunrise to begin again
    The walk of waterless sand

    And in the stories of deserted sea
    Three drops of rain could not set them free
    A costume of sand is all there will ever be

    Life does not look into the mirage so readily
    To forget and think on lush and luxurious green
    And loneliness is consigned with sunset savagery
    To the arid tract
    Where no one can hear its plea
    For water

    The same rocks tripped upon
    The same empty cup fallen
    The wavering heat a taunt and mockery
    To an ocean

    Should those footprints beckon you
    To where bright days
    Are no more than hollow and sunless memory
    Beware such captured hope
    It takes from you all that it could have been

    Brittle and unforgiving the sky of dry and windswept leaves
    Each one a reminder of your dreams
    Dreams for a little rain to come and caress your soul
    Before you became lost
    In this no place to go

    A little rain is your only plea
    Water on which your blood will feed
    Three little drops to set you free
    To flood your being
    And bring you finally
    To the sea



    Hard done by and done so unfairly
    Any soul who has not been touched
    By Love




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