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    dots Submission Name: The Beast Withindots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.53 - 101/55/51
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Beast Withindots
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    I'm ant war inside my head
    A demon with in my heart
    With the goodness leaving me
    Here I'm left to fall apart
    Reflections in the mirror
    My image just before me
    Beating on the broken glass
    He's screaming, Just set me free

    Out of the shimmering light
    See my face across the room
    And a smile as they fall
    Now my hands are stained with doom
    Why am I in the center?
    As they all lie there dyeing
    Still standing there with a grin
    I'm left helplessly crying




    Submitted on 2008-10-16 21:20:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This one is better. It still feels too desperate for my taste but it's ok. Keep on writing and sharing!
    | Posted on 2008-10-16 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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