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    dots Submission Name: Emptiness does not imply shallownessdots

    Author: Paradox
    ASL Info:    33/m/Earthbound
    Elite Ratio:    4.58 - 1055/434/90
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 951
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       This is an old poem of mine. I'm in the mother of all writers block so I didn't really write anything significant lately. I dunno why I didn't post this when I wrote it. It's an ars poetica of some sort so it must have had some important meaning back then. I hope you enjoy it...

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    dotsEmptiness does not imply shallownessdots

    Sometimes I get so tired of twisting words
    That I wish I were one of those writers
    Who can dilute their poems in prose
    I could tell you beautiful stories
    Starring me and my friend Joey Lackluster
    Chasing a dream
    Falling in love with a Japanese chick
    Named Asura Blue
    In an electrical pub, while drinking thoughts

    Maybe you remember them
    He is my ever so silent companion
    And she is the girl with X-ray eyes
    And perpetual windblown hair

    Or I could describe you the horror
    Filling this borderline trenches of thought
    I could tell you the names of giant beasts
    Like Leviathan, shining master of the wastelands
    Fenrir, odious monster, on the brink of eclipse
    I would be a hero of some sorts
    With an omnipresent, yet easy to ignore, sidekick
    Fighting ancient chimeras and dreams

    But the ways of truth abhor shallowness
    And lesser dimensions of mind
    I stand alone
    My friends and enemies alike
    Under a perpetual bombardment of thought
    I raise my flag of feelings on the highest mountain
    And fall in love only with that one star piercing this empty

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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the way you write. It is hard to tell sometimes with haiku but you are really good. I enjoyed this a lot. Especially the star at the end.
    | Posted on 2012-11-11 00:00:00 | by EmptyBox | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the sarcasm.
    Its friggin awesome.

    I actually laughed.

    This was done during a writers block?!?!

    | Posted on 2009-01-06 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      Absolutely amazing! I am glad I read it, the skill you have in writing prose is unlike most things I have read!


    | Posted on 2008-11-17 00:00:00 | by Anneboleyn707 | [ Reply to This ]
      All i have to say is for a writer's block, Wow, and amen.

    | Posted on 2008-10-23 00:00:00 | by faideddarkness | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn mate! That was really good! Original, articulate, awesome metaphors. I'm impressed!

    Really enjoyed reading it.

    | Posted on 2008-10-17 00:00:00 | by alexboy | [ Reply to This ]

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