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    dots Submission Name: Catalyst ( for Dan )dots
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    Author: ruejacobs
    ASL Info:    37/feminazi/Gehenna
    Elite Ratio:    4.91 - 566/440/154
    Words: 319
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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       walking on coals again, living inside my head


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    dotsCatalyst ( for Dan )dots
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    (c. by ruejacobs 10/17/08 3 A.M.)
    it's an aeriel manuver
    this balancing act on thin air
    and i've been doing it for years

    what other craft
    could sustain life for so long
    in this atmosphere?
    orchid-like, i sink my roots down deep
    i balance on that air, then.

    and seen from below
    one might call it grace

    the ember whose flame
    lays buried beneath white coal
    you'd be a fool
    blow away its shell of ash, Love

    let it lie, let it alone

    i have always been a bonfire
    don't question a parasite
    just dig it from your flesh
    thorns and all
    and cast it away
    before it consumes us both

    one word from you will grant it fuel
    entire worlds will burn to cinders
    i have awakened more fires in my day
    than i care to count

    i have burned like a witch in Salem
    i have burned like a martyr in Rome

    i might grow weary
    of clinging to your surface
    like an exotic moss
    of surviving on nothing but air

    i know but little else

    i have prayed to every deity i know
    to avert this conflageration
    those gods lie silent as the dirt
    impotant and sterile as sand

    now there is only you

    how shall i nurture
    when i know only want?

    even now, those leaves smoulder and curl
    your strength falls from you like the snow
    it piles in drifts at your feet

    leeching your will, i do not relent
    i wrap those vines around you
    and those vines are the vines that choke

    i am the daughter of the Underworld
    i am the child of Hel

    brimstone has nothing on me

    from the ground far below
    the canopy may look majestic

    no one could imagine what goes on up here.






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      orchid-like, i sink my roots down deep
    i balance on that air, then.

    and seen from below
    one might call it grace

    I rarely find things online that move me like this did. I feel like you've written down the last 2 years of my life. Now that I'm on the ground again, I can finally think and say, yes... it's been like this... almost exactly like this. Thank you for giving words and relating so well. Great writing!
    | Posted on 2009-01-02 00:00:00 | by SmokinG | [ Reply to This ]
      I have been studying the metals in the Platinum family lately, for some reason, so the title is what drew me in. From reading it I instantly knew what this was about. Although I didn't expect such great writing inside. You really made me think with this one as I've pondered the same subject matter myself only from the opposite side and I can't say I've found a solution. Maybe what's needed here is direct action not a catalyst. Honesty is sometimes much more valuable than any thought pattern we find our self trapped in. Remember to treat fear like a barking dog and smile sometimes, even if you are not alone. :)
    | Posted on 2008-11-21 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a far superior write to the last from you I read. Isabella may call it nonsensical, but it made perfect sense in my head.

    This write retains all the depth I felt in "sky-eater" or something like that, but has much more to say. I think it is that you write as you say, image first then words that gives you this unique flavor. I am sure you know most of us do it the other way around.

    The only thing I am unsure on is whether you are the parasite, or if you are speaking of another and your jealousy toward them? The rest, if I am understanding it as intended, is a love/hate poem to your current or perhaps a former lover.

    On a side note, sand is not sterile; beets grow rather well in the sand.
    | Posted on 2008-10-17 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ]
      so, nonsensical...

    if I were witty enough, perhaps.

    though, what I am about to write is probably nonsense just the same...

    You know what I really enjoy about your writes?
    There is depth. You tend to weave gods and life and breath and light and darkness and angst and anger and hope and strength. As well, I love how you refer to yourself in your work. I guess mostly, I always feel that it is a working on, a spilling out... the way you share what is going on is captivating...

    I am always left with this feeling of force and will and strength...
    | Posted on 2008-10-17 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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