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    dots Submission Name: Jimmy’s Genetics dots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    dotsJimmy’s Genetics dots

    Jimmy’s Genetics

    I used to see them almost every day
    Same bus stop
    To go our separate ways
    Ginger freckled haired boy
    And his Mother

    Little Jimmy was a curious kid
    Always questions
    Why Mum why Mum why Mum why
    Always made me smile

    One day bus packed like a meat loaf
    Jimmy and his Mum sat close
    Jimmy’s eyes were darting around, he even looked at me
    And I could see he was thinking of something
    Another why Mum formulating

    “Why do I have ginger hair Mum” ?
    Quite obviously he was the only one; Mum
    “Its in your genes Jimmy”
    absentmindedly answered Mummy
    she was busy chatting to somebody

    Jimmy scowled and looked at his legs

    I knew what he was thinking
    As he picked at a crease in his Levis

    The very next day
    Jimmy wore shorts
    And the next
    And the next
    And then plain grey pants

    Don’t think I ever saw him wear jeans again

    Guess Jimmy hated being the only boy
    With bright ginger orange hair.

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      This was written very well. I liked it alot because I've asked my mother that same question when I was younger. She told me I got it from my father's side. And for awhile I never stood beside him. This was great. Keep up the good work, and I'll keep reading

    | Posted on 2008-10-18 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]

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