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    Author: StainedxBlades
    ASL Info:    19/f/ Mass
    Elite Ratio:    1.76 - 8/13/24
    Words: 278
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 104
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1726



    Description:
       written for my wifey


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    I'm in love with a girl
    She's my whole world
    I love her with my whole soul
    without her my heart's a black hole
    when she's not by my side
    i sit in my room and hide
    she makes me feel so good
    to tell her this i should
    my heart is under her feet
    since the first day we did meet
    tread lightly my dear
    for sometimes i do fear
    you can crush my heart
    you have the power to start
    and end my everything, which is you
    you say "that's cute" i say "it's true"
    me and you, we make the world jealous
    all of our days are filled with love and lust
    girl, you intruigue me
    you see the good in me
    even though i'm surrounded by hate
    you're the light at the end of this tunnel
    when everything else goes down a funnel
    you still stay by me
    you fill my heart with glee
    when i see you after a while
    i can't help but smile
    you're the only thing that makes me happy
    especially when my world is crappy
    I really hate it when we fight
    I only want to make things right
    when you're here everything else fades away
    I wish you were here with me tonight
    every second, minute, hour is another thought of you
    I promise you i'll always stay true
    I'd die for you if the time was right
    I'd die for you tommorow night
    you jump, I jump always remember
    Just wait till your birthday this december
    wherever you are
    my hearts there too
    If home is where the heart is,
    my heart is with you




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