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Fragile Industry


Author: Porcelaine
ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880 /703 /256
Words: 134
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Average Vote:    5.0000
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Fragile Industry




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It's the tears that produce me,
Tears that seduce me
And in the end of a lonesome truth
It's the pain that consumes me

As I wake for the sleepers,
Shake for the creepers
In the quiet times of night
I lose for the keepers

But strange, in the end
How much I pretend
To shy away the darkness
As though I can mend

And I tell you my dreams
That daylight redeems
As illusions of a victim
Who's not as she seems

But am I weak?




Submitted on 2008-10-17 22:17:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  THIS WAS A REALLY GOOD WRITE. I READ IT A FEW TIMES !!!! IT ALMOST SEEMED EDGAR-ISH. I REALLY DON'T HAVE ANY CRITIQUE OR SUGGESTION, I LOVED EVERYTHING ABOUT IT.

great write
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| Posted on 2008-10-18 00:00:00 | by L.L.COLLINS | [ Reply to This ]
  This was written very well. It flowed well and the imagery was nice. Not alot of emotion, but hinting at it. I liked it very much. Keep up the good work, and I'll keep reading

»Haely«
| Posted on 2008-10-18 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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