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    dots Submission Name: Caretakerdots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    I used to watch as your heart would sink
    In the dead of the eve that shivered
    In ecstasy of frostbites

    I used to tell you you were one and only,
    In the grace of the world that wasn't,
    To call my own

    I used to make you laugh when you were angry
    When I knew you were, in fact,
    Oh, so scared

    I used to sit with you by the water and watch
    As you would calm almost as to mimic
    The rippling mirrors

    But now, I too am silent as you come
    And put me to sleep in awareness
    That I must restůsometimes




    Submitted on 2008-10-17 22:43:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      OMG! HOW WEIRD BUT LIKE IN AN AMAZING WAY! I LOVED IT BUT I HAVE KNOW IDEA IF I TRULY EVEN GET IT.. UNDERSTANDING THIS POEM WAS LIKE SOLVIING A MYSTERY, A REALLY GOOD MYSTERY, HOWEVER STILL A MYSTERY!!!!

    great write
    llcollins
    | Posted on 2008-10-18 00:00:00 | by L.L.COLLINS | [ Reply to This ]


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