Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Caretakerdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 723
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 655



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsCaretakerdots
    -------------------------------------------


    ###

    I used to watch as your heart would sink
    In the dead of the eve that shivered
    In ecstasy of frostbites

    I used to tell you you were one and only,
    In the grace of the world that wasn't,
    To call my own

    I used to make you laugh when you were angry
    When I knew you were, in fact,
    Oh, so scared

    I used to sit with you by the water and watch
    As you would calm almost as to mimic
    The rippling mirrors

    But now, I too am silent as you come
    And put me to sleep in awareness
    That I must restůsometimes




    Submitted on 2008-10-17 22:43:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      OMG! HOW WEIRD BUT LIKE IN AN AMAZING WAY! I LOVED IT BUT I HAVE KNOW IDEA IF I TRULY EVEN GET IT.. UNDERSTANDING THIS POEM WAS LIKE SOLVIING A MYSTERY, A REALLY GOOD MYSTERY, HOWEVER STILL A MYSTERY!!!!

    great write
    llcollins
    | Posted on 2008-10-18 00:00:00 | by L.L.COLLINS | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    167024

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Date night written by expiring_touch
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    A Sonnet for Nina written by SavedDragon
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Bond written by saartha
    One Thing written by Wolfwatching
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    To Glow written by krs3332003
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    Incubus written by monad
    Summer written by layDsayD
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    Fathoms of the Lullaby Sea written by HisNameIsNoMore
    To written by SavedDragon
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    Wasps written by Wolfwatching
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Transparent written by Daniel Barlow
    The Promise written by annie0888
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    In My Head written by faideddarkness

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry