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    dots Submission Name: Against Hopedots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsAgainst Hopedots
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    Against hope…

    I am a sailor where the sands breathe
    The dynasty of words left scattered by some silly child
    In it's castles washed away
    By the living ocean in a star's reflection

    My kingdom may come – they say
    And I'll be well on my way to safety by then,
    On guard of my tainted bloodlines,
    My heartfelt apologies and traitorous tears

    Though I am strange and distant
    My heart is my own and my eyes are of wonder
    In a screaming world where the midnights become
    Fragments of inferno

    In my thoughts I can't asphyxiate
    I pillage every sea of wrath, every sting of pain
    And I caress the soft divination of a touch
    That makes me whole again

    Against hope…

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      a most impressive write.

    "Though I am strange and distant
    My heart is my own and my eyes are of wonder
    In a screaming world where the midnights become
    Fragments of inferno"

    now thats what caught me. i've limited time on the computer, but i must say....kudos!!

    ....adding.
    | Posted on 2008-10-24 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]


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