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    dots Submission Name: THE HANGING OF JEDdots
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    Author: jamar2
    ASL Info:    52/male/Ireland
    Elite Ratio:    2.22 - 53/46/75
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsTHE HANGING OF JEDdots
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    Behind cell door nine is our man Jed
    Had killed two men, so it was said,
    A fight at the mill had bought about his fate
    Both had been stabbed, so the witness did relate.

    Two shillings and sixpence was all that he gained
    To feed his poor family, all those that remained,
    The Court past sentence as he lowered his head
    To hang by the neck, until he was dead.

    The hanging of Jed, brought amazement to all
    For stabbing the men he could not recall,
    Taking the money he did so admit
    But there in his cell, his ghost remained albeit.





    Submitted on 2008-10-18 20:37:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      HaHa i like it, great ending. very creepish. I like ur way of thinking...

    Cry
    | Posted on 2008-10-28 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]
      You've really been working up a sweat Jamar. i haven't been on ES in about a week and i have like 22 new posts from you haha.

    But back to the poem. I like the story behind it. but it doesn't seem finished to me. Like u say he's been hung and then u say hes back in his cell. And are u using remit as in hes giving back the money he stole??

    But it does flow like ur poems do...lol
    Cry
    | Posted on 2008-10-25 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]


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