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    dots Submission Name: Those Were Not Your Peanuts part 3dots
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    Author: nicodemous
    ASL Info:    7-5-82/M/Hell
    Elite Ratio:    5.58 - 283/221/121
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Haiku/Comedy
    Total Views: 642
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 365



    Description:
       Part 3 in my house mouse saga, the mouse was able to set off a snap trap and pick it clean of all peanutbutter. I have set it again. If I fail this time, I have no idea what I will do.


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    dotsThose Were Not Your Peanuts part 3dots
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    Smarter than I thought

    You mouse are a worthy foe

    Snap trap has failed me



    Be it the poison

    Or a glue board now for you

    Options weraing thin


    King of rodent beasts

    Your intellect proves as much

    My respect you've earned




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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree with dizzyfaerie, each time I see a mouse trap, I will thing of your story! May I suggest DECON. It works great. Did the job for our house.
    | Posted on 2008-11-08 00:00:00 | by grimmreaper | [ Reply to This ]
      don't kill the mousey!
    catch it and keep it as a pet!
    my pet rat i rescued from the floor and the cashiers at the local dollar store...
    if it has evaded you thus far, and has outsmarted your traps once, twice even, then obviously it is a worthy pet.
    just catch it and get it looked at to make sure it's disease-free. i promise it's worth it. they're adorable.
    ~Syn
    | Posted on 2008-10-23 00:00:00 | by Syn | [ Reply to This ]
      i've had the giggles now for several minutes after having read all three of these.
    i seriously don't think i'll look at a mouse trap in the same way ever again.
    | Posted on 2008-10-20 00:00:00 | by dizzyfaerie | [ Reply to This ]


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