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Those Were Not Your Peanuts part 3

Author: nicodemous
ASL Info:    7-5-82/M/Hell
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Part 3 in my house mouse saga, the mouse was able to set off a snap trap and pick it clean of all peanutbutter. I have set it again. If I fail this time, I have no idea what I will do.

Those Were Not Your Peanuts part 3

Smarter than I thought

You mouse are a worthy foe

Snap trap has failed me

Be it the poison

Or a glue board now for you

Options weraing thin

King of rodent beasts

Your intellect proves as much

My respect you've earned

Submitted on 2008-10-18 21:44:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I agree with dizzyfaerie, each time I see a mouse trap, I will thing of your story! May I suggest DECON. It works great. Did the job for our house.
| Posted on 2008-11-08 00:00:00 | by grimmreaper | [ Reply to This ]
  don't kill the mousey!
catch it and keep it as a pet!
my pet rat i rescued from the floor and the cashiers at the local dollar store...
if it has evaded you thus far, and has outsmarted your traps once, twice even, then obviously it is a worthy pet.
just catch it and get it looked at to make sure it's disease-free. i promise it's worth it. they're adorable.
| Posted on 2008-10-23 00:00:00 | by Syn | [ Reply to This ]
  i've had the giggles now for several minutes after having read all three of these.
i seriously don't think i'll look at a mouse trap in the same way ever again.
| Posted on 2008-10-20 00:00:00 | by dizzyfaerie | [ Reply to This ]

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