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    dots Submission Name: Life at its brink (gone)dots
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    Author: girly101
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    dotsLife at its brink (gone)dots
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    I once said
    "Your the reason for the sun,
    the reason it sets each night.
    Just so we,
    can hold eachother tight."
    But now I see,
    as it falls from the sky,
    that with each rise it brings mysery.
    Another day I must wake,
    another breathe I must take.
    With each one,
    I feel the pain eat me alive,
    from the inside.
    I cry, I cease to try,
    and for eternal sleep;
    I would let my life die.
    The reason to wake each morning;
    gone.
    The reason to not to take my life;
    missing.
    The want of happiness,
    the surrender of dark;
    absent.

    Engulfed in a dwindleing flame,
    I drown in buckets of pouring pain;
    no kisses in the rain.

    Insane,
    my mind is barred.
    Outside,
    my skin was scarred,
    but new cuts open over old,
    new stories of these marks,
    to be told.
    But I fear,
    no I smile I think,
    at the thought that my life,
    may be at its brink.

    Over.
    Gone.

    Can he really be gone?




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