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    dots Submission Name: Monsters of noondots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsMonsters of noondots
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    """""""""""""""""""""""""~*~""""""""""""""""""""""""

    She strikes
    And all the fiends of barren stone
    Screech in their forthcoming
    Gnawing and despairing…dismantling heartbeats

    Like altars of glass

    And I hear now - the tremors
    How it cries…in earthquakes
    How it strains to hold it's peace
    Wrapped in a steel case of silence and shadow

    My home under the stars

    I lay there in the banish
    - In the crumbs of mercy that hold me in place
    Drying like snake skin on the pyre of the sun
    Breathing the incandescent poison

    And I know I've lost you

    I can turn to find those cries for shelter
    I can look for rage in the hands of sorrow
    Or, in the brightest hour of a sickening scream,
    I can oath on never looking back

    And lie


    """""""""""""""""""""""""~*~""""""""""""""""""""""""




    Submitted on 2008-10-19 10:03:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "i can oath on never looking back/ and lie"

    quite a line this is...

    i felt the torment in this piece...the pull from all sides...no peace.

    very visual write. "drying like snakeskin"

    and the torture as venemous as the poison from the snake.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-05-11 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      straight forward, I see myself inside this poem, I feel the emotions twirling around me, very thoughtful, each paragraph has some sort of theme in detail, I had to read this twice, your writing is excellent , mystic , great poem

    Chris
    | Posted on 2009-08-04 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the honesty of this poem. You are running from your grief into this other dimension. Yet you can not escape your dark thoughts and drag them there with you and then they drag you back again. I tend to do that too sometimes, but I manage to escape somehow and end up, in my most desperate hours, with my most optimistic poems. Anyway, I've enjoyed this poem.
    | Posted on 2008-11-17 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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