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    dots Submission Name: Attemptsdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    Better suited to different surroundings.
    Hanging now above a vast distance all compacted within a relatively small area
    the scale spreads out into concentric cirlces
    and curls it's back against the walls

    There is a door opening in the sky where the Gods suffer the knowledge of time.
    Their patience is the hammer to the nail, and so small are all the individuals that carry them on their shoulders.

    Better understood the essence of being.
    What it is to toil, to fight, to have patience.
    And everyday to undertake that responsibility. I am the creator, the Lord, the divine. I suffer the knowledge, and I wait forever.

    Submitted on 2008-10-19 16:40:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You've been busy writing. Interesting way to describe the relationship between God and us humans. In the second stanza, you talk about "Gods" then you describe another God talking about how He is the creator in the third stanza. Couldn't really connect the dots there. Maybe you're describing different idioligies and perspectives people have on religion? "Hanging now above a vast distance all compacted within a relatively small area
    the scale spreads out into concentric cirlces
    and curls it's back against the walls" And what are you talking about here?
    | Posted on 2008-12-25 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      ...an attempt to find that divinity within ourselves is the overall idea i get from this, and one, if i may be so bold, to have contemplated feverishly as well.

    i find divinity in everything: growth, consciousness, interaction. this whole universe is a church in some way, i think, don't you?

    "There is a door opening in the sky where the Gods suffer the knowledge of time."

    lofty thoughts to ponder upon. a friend told me recently about the peculiarities of time, how it's at different speeds according to such things as the spin of the planet/moon/star and perhaps to do with gravity. apparently, satellites have to have their atomic clocks reset periodically because of this discrepancy. i was amazed when i got told this, but not surprised. because the very notion of time seems silly to me sometimes... mere... semantics, a belief system so that we can program ourselves to rise, eat, work, sleep, play, etc... an ever-full diary so we may feel complete in a way.

    eh. i'm a rambling monkey.
    forever can be the space between a heartbeat too.
    | Posted on 2008-10-23 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]
      This brought to mind a favorite book, "On The Shoulders of Giants"; and how we are all so connected on unfathomable levels.


    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-10-21 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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