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Author: Astarael
ASL Info:    19/Girl/Baltimore
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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This assignment was to write an "idea" poem. In class we read Philip Levine's "They Feed They Lion," Robinson Jeffers' "The Purse-Seine," and Carol Ann Duffy's "Warming Her Pearls" (all amazing poems!) In line with the style of these poems, we had to write a poem about an issue, an idea, or a strongly held belief or conviction, using patterned language and an idiomatic voice.


Blue are the days that lace foam collars
clinging loosely to sodden rocks
Where icy brine slaps and sputters
over brims of recessed hollows,
then stills in pools.

Blue are the slate pebbles scattering the beach.
They clink and grind and drag in the dusk
where the lone gull dives with a screech,
and pulls a wriggling crab
from the stony seams.

Blue are the clouds that sail across skyline,
pulling their inky tails through waves,
torn by wind that strikes worn batholiths
and drives grains of granite
onward in its throes.

Blue are the mussels that sleep in the depth.
They open and close with the pulse of the tide.
Hidden from the sharp beak
that dashes them open
to steal their insides.

Blue is the body that bobs in the water
till the quiet gentle slapping
slides it to shore,
tucks it between the knees of boulders,
then slowly retreats.

Blue is the moon that breaks through the shadows
and bathes the cool cliffs in a radiant hue.
With time, the zephyr's chilled bite
wears the white bones
back to blue.

Submitted on 2008-10-20 00:15:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow, did not see S5 coming , at all.
i was a bit worried by the title. blue has been so abused by "poets".
i'm a bit undecided as to whether or not i like "blue" starting each verse... almost would have liked to see it just once, by itself alone at the top. blue: and then the verses starting after minus.(or maybe since blue is the title; not at all?) i don't think it would take too much from the pattern. hmmmm... then the end would also have a more full circle effect. maybe? not sure, just a thought.
not much to offer on the background since i have never explored the books you reference.
this does remind me of a chilly walk on the beach on a drizzly morning. and murder
i think i like.
| Posted on 2008-10-20 00:00:00 | by ever | [ Reply to This ]

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